Story: Mahabharat
When the six Pandavas went to Chaos forest they faced a lot of hardship. They fought demons and monster that lived in the forest and the deeper they went the stronger the demons and monster became. Based on how strong demons and monster are they are a demon on the first level, second level demon soldier, third level demon general, fourth level demon commander, fifth level demon lord, sixth level demon king, seven-level demon emperor, eight level demon demi-god, and last ninth level demon god. Monsters also have this same level and as the name change they get stronger and stronger, weakest is demon and strongest is demon god it applied to the monsters too. Luckily they didn’t face demon and monster above the demon commander or they would have been killed or badly injured.
After roaming around in the Chaos forest for nine days they still couldn’t find the six immortal mountains. They didn’t even know it was night while finding the mountains, so they decided to rest and put up camp under larger tree by small pond. While the six brothers were eating and sleeping, Vishnu the god of preservation was keeping watch on those six brothers in the shadow so nobody can harm they when they are resting. The next day they everyone packed their bags and went out to find the six immortal mountains again.
Finally after eleven days, they found the six immortal mountains. The mountains were hiding behind the illusionary formation and they could only find the mountains because of Nakula, and Sahadeva. When they about to enter those mountains they were suddenly a demon lord appear. Looking at them Vishnu thought, “They are having really easy journey finding the six immortal mountains, it should be challenging, Aright if they can defeat one demon lord they can enter the mountains to train.” As soon as the demon lord appear all six brothers expression became ugly because they knew that no one can defeat the demon lord from all six brothers but then all the brothers look at each face and nodded and they all attacked together. Bhima fought with his body because he had the strongest body out the entire brother, Nakula and Sahadeva fought with sword, Yudhishthira fought with a spear, Arjuna and Karna fought with bow and arrow.
After fighting for one hour they were finally able to defeat the demon lord. In the process of killing, the demon lord they were injured two so they immediately took healing potion or pill. After defeating the demon lord they all picked the different mountain and went their own way. In the mountain all the brother were given different training Bhima trained his body and tempered his body through constantly destroying and healing it. Arjuna was trained in the way of archer and how to keep focus and not lose it during the battle. Karna was boiled in the hot lava to awaken his Kundal (earring) and Kavach (Armor) and then how to control his armor and earring granted by Sun god when he was born and also train in the way of Archer. Nakula and Sahadeva was trained in the way of sword and also learned how to predict and control their destiny.
It took them at least nine years to finish their training. When they left they were so strong that then can now easily defeat demon or monster that are at god level. They gained a lot in those nine years. When they reached their kingdom they found out that the kingdom was destroyed. When they saw that they were so mad that couldn’t control themselves. Then suddenly Vishnu appear and said, “Don’t worry your family is safe but now you have to defeat hundred bloods brother who chose the wrong path, the devil path and now there no going back and they also started slaughtering innocent people. Now it your job to kill them with your strength that why you guys were born to save the innocent from this calamity and this war will be called Mahabharat.”
Author notes: I rewrote this story from when the five Pandavas are exile from their own kingdom and come back to their kingdom after many years and they go to war with Kauravas but in this story instead of being exiled from their kingdom they went to train in Chaos forest and when they come back they see their kingdom was destroyed by hundred brothers so they go to war with them.
This book was written by Laura Gibbs, The title of the book is Public Domain Edition of the Mahabharata and here is the Link
Author notes: I rewrote this story from when the five Pandavas are exile from their own kingdom and come back to their kingdom after many years and they go to war with Kauravas but in this story instead of being exiled from their kingdom they went to train in Chaos forest and when they come back they see their kingdom was destroyed by hundred brothers so they go to war with them.
This book was written by Laura Gibbs, The title of the book is Public Domain Edition of the Mahabharata and here is the Link
Here is the picture of war The Mahabharata. Source
What a cool story, Jay! First of all, I liked how you explained the different levels of demons and monsters there are in your story. The classification of demons and monsters helps readers understand the demon they faced and the strength that the Pandavas have together. I enjoyed how you allowed the Pandavas train in the Chaos forest to enhance their individual skills and talents. I am glad that you allowed the family of the Pandavas to be safe and that it is up to the brothers to redeem their kingdom and fight for justice.
ReplyDeleteI like how in your version of the story the Pandavas immediately started training for the day that they returned to reclaim their kingdom. In the original story it just seemed like they wandered around and happened to find some adventure. Your story seemed much more focused on the preparation for the battles to come.
ReplyDeleteHello Jay. I liked your story. The level of the demons was a nice touch to the story. It kind of made the story have a role-playing game feel to it. One problem was that a demon lord was a fifth level. While a demon commander was only a fourth level. In the first paragraph you mentioned that would have been killed or badly injured if they faced a fifth or higher. This made me feel that there could have been more wounds or death during the battle. Overall you did well, and I look forward to your future writings.
ReplyDeleteI'm so curious about these six immortal mountains! I'm curious if they know what they look like/what to look for, because they sound so mysterious! This is a great story, and gave me Lord of the Rings vibes. Great work!
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